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Old 2004-12-19, 10:41
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A really, really long poem/rant

This served it's purpose long enough.
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Old 2004-12-19, 12:04
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Well, it is definitely long.
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Old 2004-12-19, 15:41
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I suppose it's really more of a poetic rant than it is a poem. This not something I ever intend to work on, and I'm not really looking for constructive criticism. I just figured I'd post it, I guess.
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Old 2004-12-19, 20:34
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Once in awhile something brings tears to my eyes and once in awhile I save hard copies of piece I read at tabcrawler and here that really are well done. This was a wonderfully done, all too common story. I'm going to assume it's your lifes' story. If not you did one heck of a good job telling this. You sharing the story might make a difference to someone else who may have a simialr world growing up. I hope someday you can get hold of the anger against your father because that takes so much energy, but it can be done. I worked at the local children's home for 8 years as a cook and the last couple years I was trained in Youth Leadership so a lot of times the kids would talk to me when they didn't share with their caseworkers or the other staff.
I don't know if you're into reading much, but Dave Pelzer wrote a book after his series beginning with "A Chile Called It" . Though your story is a little different from his, he was abused by his mother, his book "A Man Named Dave" might help you with some of the hurdles you're faced with. The whole series is excellent and true.
I thought it was especially moving that you included your thoughts on your mother trying to do her best. I hope you've let her know what she means to you. I was a single parent for awhile and I tried to do my best for my kids, too. It was so hard sometimes.
But anyways, this is almost as long as your piece! I'll shut up now. You did excellently with this.
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Old 2004-12-21, 18:42
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I definately like it. It gets some message across, it makes me feel stuff. Good writing.
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Old 2005-01-05, 18:43
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you should let your dad know how you feel, read him the piece, face to face. i have dealt with alot of shit with my dad too, he wasnt there for me up until a year and a half ago, i barely knew the man, but i still have the poems i wrote about him, and i will show him one day when i feel the time is right, when it needs to come out. that was one of the best rants i have read in a long, long time.
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