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Old 2004-11-11, 23:52
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Its time for me to post some more of my abstract grind songs, thus here it is,
note that the vocals are to be clean, unless the line starts with a star, in which case it is some sort of grrrr voice (most likely pitch shifted), and the bits in brackets are comments to help with the following of the song which is included in midi form in the zip file (to make it easier to follow)

Our planet reveling in sickness and decay
It is filled to the brink with creulty and dismay
Corperate pigs feasting upon the natural resources
*before too long they will be fighting over [the] last morsels

we must rid our world of this plague of human filth

(break)(2 bars)
*we must fight for the world rights since the planet can't(high bit)

show them what it means to be bleed dry and raped
they will be subjected to a fate that cannot be escaped

*hung by their feet and stabed in the throat
*then slowly bound with a tight rope
*they will feel blood run across their face (high bit)
*subjected to thus punishment
*they cannot cope
*and we will have saved the human race (high bit)
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Old 2004-11-12, 12:12
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Strangely enough I really liked this piece. It had 2 of my least favorite words in verse in it, but you pulled it off very well. I could really hear a paper melody for it in my head. It would be a great piece for a concept type score.
No, changes. I think a lyric like this shouldn't be hidden in growls either. I liked the way you presented the parts.
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