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2004-10-03, 19:37
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A poem I wrote whilst bored....:)
I am the horse of the night
I am darker than black beauty in a dark room at night
Galloping into the distant sun
Testicles, large, mean, round
Bouncing up and down as I gallop
Fearless through the hills!
Where are you my jockey?
Be you in the hands of another ass other than myself?
Do not leave me be on my own
I miss thee with every gallop
I miss the fondling you bring to me when we meet
My head, as long as my journey
My journey, as long as my face
Your cock, the centre of my dreams
Which land be you in my jockey?
My tail blows gently in the wind
Swaying gently like a flacid phallus
Oh how I miss the days you blew me too
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2004-10-03, 19:39
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theres an entire forum for this kind of stuff you stupid infected cunt.
EDIT: it fucking sucks anyway.
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2004-10-03, 19:45
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I am a tax on the world..
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 haha, fucktard.
And that was messed up. I have never read anything that contained a horse and his balls. 
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2004-10-03, 19:48
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Gee guys, thanks, I knew you'd love it!
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2004-10-03, 19:57
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shut the fuck up
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2004-10-03, 20:05
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This is so touching, thanks for makin' me feel welcome. Faggots
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2004-10-03, 20:09
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shut
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2004-10-03, 20:16
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You have a serious attitude problem dude
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2004-10-03, 20:19
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either that or you are just a gaping cunt
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2004-10-03, 20:23
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shut up andrew, you have the brain mass of a fucking centipede and your gay. thx!
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2004-10-03, 20:23
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You have a serious attitude problem dude
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He does. He's also a raging homosexual. I would keep my distance from him if I were you.
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2004-10-03, 21:01
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The poetry forum is that way *points to the poetry forum*
Hoestly, how did you miss it? You have to scroll past the bastard thing in order to get to the chit-chat forum. If I were you I'd cut back a little with the furious masturbating sessions, otherwise you'll be completely blind before you get to drinking age.
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2004-10-03, 21:02
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you spelled "honestly" wrong.
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2004-10-03, 21:06
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moved to the poetry forum.
Uddingal shut the fuck up.
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2004-10-03, 21:08
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Fantastic work. I foresee a new revolution in poetry: all the structurelessness of free verse with the pretentious, antiquated phrasing and vocabulary of Victorian poets. I hope to see you in publication soon, William Carlos Swinborne.
Seriously, this is an offense to poetry, humorous or otherwise. It didn't have to be, but the total lack of discipline, the unnecessary psuedo-pretention, the piss-poor phrasing, the 'other' redundancy, and basically the total bungling of an otherwise brilliant topic - a homosexual relationship between a horse and its jockey - made it one. However, if you persevere and squeeze a diamond out of this mess, I hope to see it posted in the proper forum. Since you're obviously going for a parody of 19th century poetry, try using a meter.
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2004-10-03, 21:10
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you spell "pseudo" wrong :(
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2004-10-03, 21:16
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IF YOU POST IN THE FUCKING TITLE BOX AGAIN I WILL SEND A VIRUS TO YOUR CONPUTER!!!
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2004-10-03, 21:21
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Master Killer
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Ok. the fuck learned how to type in the box, the song sucks and thats it.
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