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Old 2004-06-18, 20:00
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sanities decent

dragged into this beautiful life
screaming against fate
disgust towards reality

infant

happy with my surroundings
everything is new
i trust

childhood

Dragged into this conformist world
screaming towards the world
disgust towards ignorance

teenager

Content with my life
everything is new
I accept

adult

realization that it's been short and i know nothing

death
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Old 2004-06-18, 21:41
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Yup, we could all live a billion years and still not know what tomorrow would bring. Guess we have to settle for what we're given and learn and experience what we choose to and what life chooses for us.
I liked this piece. It sort of seems the same mood as the one I wrote that you commented on. Very true.
Cool.
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Old 2004-06-19, 08:28
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hey, check your title,
you're probably looking for
Sanity's Descent
unless you misspelled it on purpose.
notice how infants and teens are alike and how adults and children are alike. you probably did that intentionally.
nice
overall, I like
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Old 2004-06-19, 18:53
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i guess it is a spelling mistake. But hey with poetry everything goes.

Thanks for observing what I was trying to convey
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Old 2004-06-19, 19:59
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i got wicked confused looking at the thread title

or is that on purpose?
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Old 2004-06-19, 23:10
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it's drunken philosophy.

Strolled into a world of sanity
It seems to be quite confusing
Lost my grasp long ago
figured that was the way of life

Vomited thoughts of reality
choked on ideas of faith
forsaken dreams of morality
accepted that all is not lost

drunken ideals of poetry
rambling words typed in angst
read not the bullshit i type
cuz it's all garbage cleaned from my mind

You know, i used to write shite when i was younger
and it was filled with so much emotion
it was deep,
painful
but now the shit that spews from my mind,
i can't find the anger.
i guess i'm too content
i can't dig up the hate
which helps feed my rage

I won many prizes in poetry contests
for poems of war and love
but now i'm a fucking shell
i've been sucked into society
to qoute slayer a "skeleton"
I've conformed while hating to do so
instead of thinking of the worlds well being
i think of how i'm gonna pay next weeks bill
instead of happiness,
i dwell on being alive
but i'm happy
i guess ignorance is blisss
and all that shit



crawled to the edge of sanity
peered over the edge
got lost in the confusion of logic
so i fell back into our world

fly to the heights of normality
mingled with the mischosen echelon
didn't like it.....
so i jumped back down

now i dwell with the working class
average assholes like me
at least i know i deal with people
as low as they come

woke up in a pool of vomit
a dose of my ignorant youth
swore to myself, never again
woke up next week in the same state

it's all words
it's all worlds
it's all bullshit


spent half of my life unhappy
spent the other half content
i've realized it's much better
to like what's been thrown at me

by now i've conceided to garbage
spewing what's on my mind
staring at nothingness
reincarnated

how long can an individaul ramble
till his mind is worn
my mind is torn
it's been raped by propaganda
destroyed by a system



glad
censorship. It's a whore. Yet the internet is its' pimp.
so i say in my opinionated speal:
fuck bush
fuck censorship
fuck ignorance
fuck canada
fuck the us
fuck the world
fuck me
fuck you
fuck you
fu8ck you
fuckal;f you
aofudlkack you
f u
fu
fu
now that
s
p
oe
try
frum
the drunin
fool.
like
mr. mojo risin
i am
a fool
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Old 2004-06-20, 04:09
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No, occifer I'm serfectly pober.
Ah, the first first captured my whole life's essence. There was a place in the 6th verse that h ad the word
edge' twice close together. I think that if you used -rim or border- it would sound better than the rep there. There was a bit of repetitive thought in this but generally I thought it was pretty darn good. Very realistic from a poet/musician's point of view so I thought it was cool.
The second piece made me smile whether it was meant to or not. I think partly due to empathy and partly due to you seeming to write while under the influence. Hmm, WUI ? Enjoyable reads from the heart.

BTW, I've always wondered what the differecne is between shite and shit? Is there any?
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2004-06-20, 04:22
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shite is non swearing shit. you might have said it at skool or in front of your parents without getting slapped when you were younger.

im going to write something maybe a bit like this thread. it will be... well, yeah a bit like this thread :P check it out l8r
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Old 2004-06-20, 09:29
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well thank you for your comments.
it is very repititious, but i was drunk and dwelling on certain thoughts.
Mostly ramblings that i typed when they popped into my mind.
Jim morrison style i guess.

Isn't shite, shit in england?
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