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Old 2003-08-01, 20:17
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Whoa, that end was badass. You are very picuresque in your writing but you didn't use anything but everyday language. I've noticed most of the best liked lyric in whatever genre are like that. And it has that ending that's especially appealling. I don't go for the growls for this, but something strong edged with emphasis on the lyric would really sound great. I liked this a lot.
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