
2003-06-13, 15:32
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Master Killer
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Join Date: Feb 2002
Location: Utrecht, The Netherlands
Posts: 11,368
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Jezus, that's long!
but yeah, it will probably work for DM, I like the choice of words, like
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Unstoppable will of stone
tearing your flesh to the bone
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the last couple of sentences are cool too, I like this part a lot:
Quote:
Taking your faith to the edge of a knifeTaking your faith to the edge of a knife
In the shadows is where the truth lies
Silent amongst you all, staring with hateful eyes
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Yeah, good stuff, I don't like the part about Mary's Fetus etc. that second last verse just didn't feel like the rest of the song, but it might just have been my perception of the that verse.
anyways, good job on the lyrics, especially for a first time!!!

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