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Old 2011-08-26, 21:17
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Is the last line typoed somehow?

"The piper finally came to collect,
Damn what a debt.
The words we spoke must have come with interest,
Cause these emotions are relentless."

Them's some fine lines there, bud.

4, 5, and 6 in the second stanza were iffy reading them, but might be okay in a song. They just seemed like something thrown in for rhymes' sake.
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