2011-08-26, 21:17
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
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Is the last line typoed somehow?
"The piper finally came to collect,
Damn what a debt.
The words we spoke must have come with interest,
Cause these emotions are relentless."
Them's some fine lines there, bud.
4, 5, and 6 in the second stanza were iffy reading them, but might be okay in a song. They just seemed like something thrown in for rhymes' sake.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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