That's cool.

I'll try to come close to what you're saying in your lyrics, but if I miss the mark let me know.
Iīm just a shadow of a child
I used to be
All beatiful insideīs been
- All beauty inside has been
broken by years
Even though you slur to make it sound like "inside's" it reads easier with the word "has" there. It's not a good contraction to use, but if you want to keep it there that's okay. I see why.
Everyday there was something new
To see and learn
Time after time all unknowledges
Were burnt
-Can you clarify what you mean by "unknowledges?" I don't think that's a word.
Bridge:
When has it happened
- When did it happen or What has happened - if either of those fit your meaning.
Who is to blame
The change shattered
With all my life and broke my game
- Do you mean "The change shattered All my life and broke my game?"
I used to live in my free world
With no cares
Of the god called money that rules
Everywhere
Iīve never really thought that
My soul could bleed
That I would ever meet with
All lies and greed
-Nice flow to that stanza.
Bridge:
When has it happened
Who is to blame
The change shattered
With all my life and broke my game
Chorus:
I donīt wanna be
I donīt wanna be an adult since now
- an adult anymore
I donīt wanna see
I donīt wanna see the world goes down
- the world go down or the world sink down?
Indifference and selfishness
I had to fight
Obey work pay die is life with
We all satisfied
-
The last 2 lines are a little unclear. Could you explain them a little more?
Bridge:
When has it happened
Who is to blame
The change shattered
With all my life and broke my game
Chorus:
I donīt wanna lose
I donīt wanna lose sweet innocence
I donīt wanna feel
I donīt wanna feel blood of childhood on my hands
I hope that helps out a little bit.
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