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Old 2009-10-27, 10:47
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Borders on angsty, but to me it's got its head above the water at least. I think the line "Its hard to bring my self up bruised and battered" was spot on for the whole feel of the piece, but there's hope in it that even though the character feels afraid and failing presently. Sometimes life is like "Let's Make a Deal" and the wrong doors get opened before the right one finally does, but when it does it's confirmation of strengths as well as weaknesses.
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