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Old 2009-04-28, 11:03
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You have carnage as his strategy in the first stanza so you might describe how that will be done. In the second, obliteration of a nation. Why does he hate that so much? What does he hope to accomplish by making them extinct?
It's like bones are the spine of the piece and you've added a few ribs to it, but you're further adding muscle and tendon to it.
I hope that helps. If you come up with something be sure to post it and I'll look it over for ya along with everyone else.
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