I'm generally not into poetry (or even lyrics), but I really liked this. I sort of got hooked after the first few lines and couldn't stop reading, which is a good sign!

Unfortunately my ignorance in matters of poetry means I can't offer any in-depth analysis or criticism haha, but as the old saying goes "I don't know much about art, but I knows what I likes!".

If you ever put this to music I'd love to hear it.