
2008-04-15, 15:23
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Supreme Metalhead
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Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: Massachusetts
Posts: 800
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"Just" in the second line would be the logical word instead of "justified", rhythmically and rhyme wise.
I'd also like to call you out on plagiarizing Ice Cube in the third stanza.
I feel like you wrote this with the specific intention to piss people off in petty ways... not that you actually did or anything.
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Originally Posted by BassBehemoth
TRANZ? LLOZ.
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Originally Posted by BOB_ZE_METALLEU
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Originally Posted by CannibalXampire
Everyone is wrong.
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