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Old 2008-04-15, 15:23
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"Just" in the second line would be the logical word instead of "justified", rhythmically and rhyme wise.

I'd also like to call you out on plagiarizing Ice Cube in the third stanza.

I feel like you wrote this with the specific intention to piss people off in petty ways... not that you actually did or anything.
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