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Old 2008-01-31, 08:56
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I think I'd change the title to elude to smoking like "My Truest Flame" or "The Ember that Burns for Only Me." I dunno. I'm having a dull writing time right now. But anyways, I'd also take out the word "smoking" all though it. It lets the piece breathe more like a long comfortable drag and relaxing exhale watching the curls or rings drift off into sun's rays pouring through a window and melding before complete disappearance. Maybe pulling a worry or unpleasant thought away. I'm not condoning smoking, but give what you have a little more shot in the arm and I think it'll be more satisfying. It'll read like a Marlboro instead of a Basic.
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