This sounded like a good concept, given Bobbi's interpretation, for a tale in a world like the one in William Gibson's 'Neuromancer'. Had the vernacular/colloquial feel, as well as the more abstract touches as in 'veiling eyes' and 'eating paths'. Also has the grim vision of the world (although in Neuromancer, the world is often portrayed quite grandly at the same time, as Gibson goes on about the geodesics of domes et cetere).

Maybe you could complete - or expand - this into like a long prose or poem. Or a concept album with accompanying music.

Liked it.

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