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Old 2006-06-02, 06:24
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Originally Posted by No Heart
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and I let on last word escape my lips
"ohh!"

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You forgot the "sweet mystery of life, at last I've found hiiiimmmmm!"

Yeah, this was dumb. I rarely say it, but it's not romantic. It's not a turn-on. It's just description. "she reached her orgasm" --if that's not teeny-bopper stuff I don't know what is. It sure sizzles my somethingorother--not! Add some metaphor. Make it intriguing. Do something with it. Toss it in your bottom drawer or line your birdcage! I KNOW from reading your other stuff you can do much better than this so do it!


Wally, thanks for my first major laugh of the day. Your line was poetic! So much imagery! Too much imagery in fact! lol
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