Overall it's really good - the whole thing has a very "morbid angel" feel, or at least to me - I can imagine lyrics like that being sung on "Covenant". It's well written, but I'm not sure the first stanza is as good as the rest - it doesn't seem to fit so easily into a rhythm, although it'd probably work in an actual song.

I'm being picky, and I can be, so that's good, cuz this is ace.

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