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Old 2004-11-10, 11:14
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OOooo, that's pretty cool, LBXXX. So eh, each paragraph is referring to a specific item? ...I'm guessing the first paragraph is just an intro(cool BTW), the second perhaps to your thesaurus, and that's all I can think right now. Well, the only thing I ask is about the line, "He tried to bury our thoughts in distortion perverse." The last 2 words are a little shaky I think, so maybe you could change it to "distorted perverse" or even distortion's perverse" like it's possessive. anyhoo, I like this because it has some wicked things in it.
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