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Old 2004-07-24, 04:00
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Quote:
Originally Posted by skatingncheese
I'm sitting in my room
Alone in the dark
Wondering why i'm so different
Slowly falling apart.


My confession
(I need help with the very last line, so if anybody has any idea's, let me know.)


I'm sitting in my room
Alone in the dark
Wondering why i'm so different
I cannot leave a mark

Quote:
Originally Posted by skatingncheese
Watch me waiting
Watch me sin
Watch me cry
Watch me win
Watch my anticipation
Eat through all significance
(need help here.. I was thinking something along the lines of something to do with indifference.. )


Eat through all significance
My life ends with indifference


I like the first one, good imagery, fairly dark. The second one is a bit lame, like my first poem i posted its somewhere on the first page of Poetry Lyrical... titled: Life, and how i feel about it.
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