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Old 2003-12-16, 14:43
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Iread this awhile back and I didn't like it but couldn't figure out why. So I let it rest and came back again to reread it.
I think that the chorus is fine, but the verses are lackluster. Yes, you're describing what will happen but it needs to be more than just a list of this will happen and then that . Add some more drama into those and I think it will come together more positively.
I'm not going to offer ideas of what to say because I'm not familiar with Vidar at all and barely with Odin. Get some more guts into it and don't be shy about it. It doesn't sound like a mellow song. Give it some balls.
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