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Ephemeral Slaughter
Finally came out of a block I've had for awhile so here goes...
Since the beginning, death awaits you Out of the shadows, its becoming Your last breath, soon to be here Fearing for death, it wrenches the core Emotionless Compassionless Bludgeon, the hammer it falls Blood stains the floor but I need more Bones and sinew, the clashing of man Burning with hatred, look in my eyes Try what you can, you soul won't survive Cries of agony, the pain inside Stabbing you blind, suffer my kind Intestinal devastation Glazing of the eyes Through a bloody view you see the moon Laughing echoes, no one scorns It shines darker than ever before The crack of your skull, that's my tune Anger inside, forever doomed Emotionless Compassionless Seering pain, within runs through Pulp of puss, "please God, what did I do?" Nowhere to run, no one to call Pleading for life as your brain hits the wall Always fun writing DM...:behead: |
Whoa, that end was badass. You are very picuresque in your writing but you didn't use anything but everyday language. I've noticed most of the best liked lyric in whatever genre are like that. And it has that ending that's especially appealling. I don't go for the growls for this, but something strong edged with emphasis on the lyric would really sound great. I liked this a lot.
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Thank you much for the compliments :beer: Just one of those days when everyone gets on you nerves, I think we'll still use growls, perhaps make it more audible to the listener. It'll probably end up being nothing but brutal and fast, so as to keep to the impact I hope to achieve.
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Sounds good to me. Any chance of you posting the finished product?
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Very nice. :)
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