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Alothrysis 2003-06-24 19:44

Human wrights
New song I wrote about 2 min. ago, I thought the idea of people making humans sounded cool so I wrote about it, still kinda rough

Human wrights

Come down to the inside
Lie down, life awaits you
Bright as day yet cold as night
Lifeless, your limbs we’ll choose

Their steel coffins
Allowing no breath to escape
Of the bodies, their limbs we’ll cleanse
Dismembering rape
Avoiding opposition, new lives at stake

Artisans of new life
Conception is not a must
Creation with the blade of a knife
No deity to look for
Craftsman you will trust

Look upon these walls
Empty souls hanging freely
Back to their bodies they call
Electricity and thread
All that is needed
To bring back the dead

Operation is underway
The scalpel I clench
The wondrous stench
Reeking of decay

Paracentesis is how it begins
Ostium of the peritoneum
Looking just below the skin
Making sure of the organs within

Bullet wound to the bregma
The cranium we must replace
Giving appearance a new face
No more is your facial stigma

Over time the taenia was destroyed
Put into motion by a round to the brain
Finding another will be no bother
Receiving nothing but personal gain

Placing everything intact
Assuring the musculation
Is the more to give back?
Disgusted they’ll view you
Nothing but degredation

Giving thanks to death
Corpses united by syssarcosis
Charged with electricity
Hoping to get a breath

Admiring our foetus
Morbid deities we are
Inside our mental veil
Life we won’t starve

powersofterror 2003-06-25 07:23


Lord Arioch 2003-06-25 13:17

Again, good choices of words.
Keep the good work coming.

L,B'XXX 2003-06-25 14:28

It's above me vocabularywise. It did have some interesting moments though. I just can't picture some metalhead screaming this one. Especially one that's drunk and trippin' .:) But that's just my opinion.

Alothrysis 2003-06-25 16:50

Wow, thanks for the compliments. As for LB, I had no idea what those words meant 10 min. before I wrote the song, thanks to the dictionary for that.

powersofterror 2003-06-26 06:32

i hear that, i do it all the time.

L,B'XXX 2003-06-26 12:42

Aw, power'o't , I just gave you a compliment about your pieces in your thread. I thought you were a creative genius. Well, I guess if you can make it NOT sound like you used a dictionary you are a genius.
Don't let that go to your head though.

I just can't hear , for instance, Wally, stupid on JD singing this:

"Paracentesis is how it begins
Ostium of the peritoneum"

Although that might be quite amusing now that I think about it. He'd probably say , "Aw, f*ck that part." heehee


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