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SinThetIc 2003-06-04 01:24

!!! Drunk Hate SOng !!!
 
She used to listen while I would cry…
Now I hold her as she’s lifeless
As a gift she Gave me her one last breath… with a wish
Remember the torture you put me through…
My tears flowed down into a stream of red…
Rested upon her head was my massive cock
I told her to rot in hell just like her mother the Whore…
Before I left that appalling place, I left a little present on her face…

Death by feces is what the autopsy said….

How can one live with a shattered romance…
What the hell happened to my pants…
Feelings no more…Hate just a feeling I adore …
God her mom is a smelly whore…
One more beer before I am dead to the world….

Dont drink a Write

metal=life 2003-06-07 12:30

haha thats awsome

L,B'XXX 2003-06-07 15:09

umm.....
umm.....hmm....
Tenacious D on crack ??
:D

The line "What the hell happened to my pants " line reminded me of Walpurgis friend , Gildo, who woke up at our house one morning and said that very thing ! They were clear out in the dining room for some reason. (I don't ask too many questions about things like that. I know better.)
This was disgusting . It was gross. But obviously you have a sense of humor about a broken heart........or else you're REALLY a psycho lush.
Parts I liked and parts seemed like a 14 year old trying to shock someone. If you're serious about it, have a revisit and polish that baby up so it's got a little broader appeal.
Hey, I know there's lots of 'kids' on here, but I'm a 43 year old one so it's an 'older mom's opinion.'


Make sure you're semi-sober if you tidy it up !! heehee And keep writing !


"I'm not asssss drrrrUNK as some thinkle peep!!! "


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