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L,B'XXX 2011-09-13 19:12

One Beautiful Moment
 
Got a little push into writing again. Thanks for reading and commenting if you do.

"One Beautiful Moment"

One beautiful moment
That's all it was
Fragile, I thought
But there was no room
For more than a moment
One beautiful moment

I didn't notice the stars were falling
Through the summer sky
I only saw them crashing,
Burning out, vaporizing
In midair, in mid-mind
In my mind

I didn't notice the leaves had changed
Bleeding the color of tears
Falling like they always have
Melding, uncontrollably
Falling like always
Nondescript

I didn't notice the shallow sea
Diving head first, blindly
I only saw the cool, blue water
Swirling discord
Near fatal fall

One beautiful moment
That's all it was
Fragile, I thought
But there was no room
For more than a moment
One beautiful moment

BJH
9/13/2011

Hugozhor 2011-09-14 04:05

I like it. Nice one.
Beatiful verse "Bleeding the color of tears "

L,B'XXX 2011-09-14 10:53

Thanks. I kind of liked that, too. I don't use blood references too often, but it seemed to fit there visually.

Pr0az 2011-09-14 19:04

Damn good love the metaphors....


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