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JAMF 2009-06-24 10:02

Animal Dream (Lyrics and stream of song)
 
I've been on a bit of a creative streak these past few days and this is probably the song I'm most proud of. The lyrics are below and a link to the actual song on Myspace. Any feedback is much appreciated.



www.myspace.com/severedspirit6



Animal Dream

I'm walking down,
To the forest.
I can't be late,
All my friends are waiting.

The lion, goat and bear,
Are calling me over.
We are an army,
We are ready to fly.

Push the tree.

We climb aboard,
A seat upon the bark.
The night air is cold,
The moon is in our eyes.
This is a secret land,
A magic encounter.
We are an army,
we are already flying.

Push the tree.

L,B'XXX 2009-06-25 10:01

When I read the lyric it didn't do much for me, but with the music I liked it much better. I wasn't sure what kind to expect. For some reason the drums just didn't seem in sync to me. Maybe it's just my speakers.
Anyways, this seems like it should be part of a series of songs. Any chance of that?

Btw, I listened to several of your other pieces and really like them. They're definitely trippy and you have a very nice voice for that style.

JAMF 2009-06-28 15:36

Hey thanks a lot for listening to my music!

My approach to lyrics these days is to just go for it and not hold back or criticize what I've written too much. I also tend to be a lot more literal now in what I write.

I found myself getting too swamped in trying to write songs nobody but me could understand!

This one is about a dream I had when I was very young where me and a big group of human-animals pushed a tree over, sat on it and flew over a forest.

Amadeus 2009-06-28 17:09

That's the spirit. Don't try to be artistic when writing, generally that'll just land you with a pompous piece of shit.

It works nicely with that music. Like Tripple-X says, trippy.
As for the lyrics themselves they are the way I like it - gets what needs to be said said, enough to trigger the imagination with the music added but doesn't try to impress anyone with a lot of pictures and metaphors or other crap to that general effect.
Nice work!

L,B'XXX 2009-06-29 08:57

Great story behind the song! I love to hear those. That explains the simplicity of the lyric and gives it a lot more life to me.

Write on!


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