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L,B'XXX 2009-05-09 20:00

Idle Time
 
Thanks for reading my poem.

"Idle Time"

Idle time
Painting pictures in my head
Every brush stroke off-white
No saturation or depth
So not me anymore

The blue sky is bluer now
Maybe that's the key
Color on the outside from the inside
Making changes in routine
Maybe that's the muse inside of me
Breaking free

BJH
5/9/2009

Amadeus 2009-05-11 05:40

Just checking - first verse, third line, it's meant to be off and not of? Just a shade of meaning I was thinking of.

A pleasant read catching a moment of contemplation, it's one I could certainly come back to more than once (already have). I think you have a point, by the way.

L,B'XXX 2009-05-11 06:42

Yes, that's supposed to be off. As in not bright white. I just looked it up and it's supposed to be a hyphenated word. That should clear it up.

Thanks for the commentary. I'm glad you liked it. It's sincere contemplation.


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