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Tulvox 2008-11-11 16:46

"Devastated"
 
"Devastated"
Jacob Fitzlaff
11/11/08

From the rooftops of the Belvedere
They reign in blood and terror and fear
And this is how the story ends
But where did it all begin

Once upon a time
There was a land of love and the kids were fine
There was no hate or war or crime
And everyone survived

But then they all came marching in
Building walls to put an end
To the freedoms that we all enjoyed
Our only exit was destroyed

So will you fight for the flag
Take a life so willingly
You'll be bound and gagged
If they find out you disagree
I declare them to be the enemy
Enemies of peace

So what else could we do
We watched as the riots ensued
Not for what was on our minds
But to keep us all in line

Everywhere you looked
There was bullet holes and burning books
Shattered homes and broken glass
You could taste the sulfur and smell the ash

And now the fire burns
A vigil to our unsaid words
One nation for the bourgeoisie
One nation of debris

So will you fight for the flag
Take a life unerringly
You'll be bound and gagged
If they catch you out on the streets
I declare them to be the enemy
Enemies of peace

And even when we're dead and gone
The fight will carry on and on
Even when we're dead and gone
The fight will carry on and on
Even when we're dead and gone
The fight will carry on and on
After we are dead and gone
The fight will carry on

So will you fight for the flag
Bow your head to complanceny
You'll be bound and gagged
If you ever try to be set free
I declare them to be the enemy
I declare them to be our enemy
I declare them to be the enemies of peace

L,B'XXX 2008-11-11 16:59

Hi Jake! Nice to see you back around again. :)

Is it coincidental that you posted a piece like this on Veteran's Day? I googled Belvedere to see if that would help determine exactly what you're referring to, but that didn't help a bit so what's the background for the piece?

As far as just the content goes it's got a good balance of topic. The title is perfect.

Tulvox 2008-11-11 18:33

Good to know that you are still around as well !

I actually came up with these last night, so yeah Veteran's Day is really coincidental. Almost too coincidental ;)

Belvedere is an Italian word that means "beautiful view." Also some kind of architectural thing that is completely irrelevant to the song.

I was really nervous about the title, I really couldn't decide on anything. Not even my girlfriend, who is leagues and leagues more intelligent that I could ever hope to be, had no ideas. So just went with the generic, kind of vague title.

I think, upon rereading that in line 27 I'm going to change "fire" to "fires." Mark that one up to continuity.

You were just the person I wanted to see this, I'm glad you were lurking today. :)

Nemesis9 2008-11-12 06:06

Nice one!

Btw, Belvedere is the name of a castle here in Vienna, but it was quite obvious you didn't referred to this ;)

L,B'XXX 2008-11-12 17:24

That's cool and thanks. When I looked it up there was about 20 different things pertaining to it so I didn't have a clue which was the right one.
And fires gives a whole different scenerio to that verse. I think it works better, too.
A castle in Vienna? That sounds wonderful, but I won't get off topic. :)


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