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SkelatorOfSteel 2008-04-15 02:02

this poem is entitled "Police grabbin at my nuts"
 
Police grabbin' at my nuts
cause i'm a minority they feel it is justified

I did nothing to deserve this nut-grabbing
yet i still stand oppressed by the whiteman

Fuckin' with me cause i'm a teenager
with a little bit of gold and a pager

What kind of world do we live in
where a man can gets hit nuts grabbed by law enforcement

Can't even walk down the street
to get money from my bitches

Requiem 2008-04-15 14:09

Horrible.

Me himself 2008-04-15 15:23

"Just" in the second line would be the logical word instead of "justified", rhythmically and rhyme wise.

I'd also like to call you out on plagiarizing Ice Cube in the third stanza.

I feel like you wrote this with the specific intention to piss people off in petty ways... not that you actually did or anything.

L,B'XXX 2008-04-25 17:39

A pager?????? hahahaha :rofl:

At least law enforcement don't have teeth like squirrels do. Now that's a song.

This just made me laugh. No way on earth it's serious. Good for a giggle.

CannibalXampire 2008-04-25 17:43

You can try to satirize rap music all you want, but it doesn't change the fact that you're not funny and not good at it.

fiery(arm)pits 2008-07-20 13:53

nice...
 
funny poem. sounds like your town has a bad police force. ;)


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