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Tulvox 2007-02-04 03:01

"Bad Luck"
 
"Bad Luck"
Jacob Fitzlaff
2/4/2007

I jumped the bus outta Minnesota,
The small town drama just won't do it for me.
Lookin' for a drug so I went to California,
To San Francisco where the love is free.
Well I found out that the world spins on a penny,
And nothin' ever works out the way that it should.
So I'm stuck downtown cause I've run outta money.
Went lookin' for a party to make myself feel good.

We'll it's just bad luck.
I'm goin' outta my mind.
I Ain't got no solutions.
But I'm havin' the time...

I was buzzing off the punk rock on 924,
Gilman Street was the place to be.
All the punk girls were screaming for more,
You could see miniskirts linin' up down the street.
So I took a chance and said "Hey baby,
I'm feeling kinda lost could ya show me around?"
She just laughed and told me I was crazy,
Said "Nothin' ever changes you're too lost to be found."

We'll it's just bad luck.
I'm goin' outta my mind.
I Ain't got no solutions.
But I'm havin' the time...

I was feeling kinda funny my bad luck was runnin',
Outta control but you ain't never seen,
Any one so happy man I was up to somethin',
Standin' with the punks I was part of the scene.
Life was movin' fast but you know there's a catch,
When everybody's givin' you the stare down.
So I bummed a smoke and asked for a match,
Start a new day and headed back downtown.

We'll it's just bad luck.
I'm goin' outta my mind.
I Ain't got no solutions.
But I'm havin' the time of my life.

Infinity 2007-02-04 03:11

apart from punks being fucking retarded, this is pretty cool. cant beat the original you gave me earlier though man, would have been better as a poem like that where it was i feel... some of it just feels forced, where the original you gave me flowed well,.

Tulvox 2007-02-04 03:17

The original I gave ya was just the first verse. haha :beer:

Infinity 2007-02-04 03:20

yeah i know and thats the best part

L,B'XXX 2007-02-05 08:58

I thought it sounded better switching the second and third verses around. The first verse was really good and so was the chorus. You're fun to read.

I adored the line "Well I found out that the world spins on a penny." That was cool.


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