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well ... I just wrote this shit tonight ... and I wanted to post it ... I know it doesn't make any sense ... but here it goes ...
Here I am in the middle of an unknown forest In the silence of the day that open arms to the night while the crows of death fly to the forgotten land Walking over a path of blood of Ancient Masters onto the altars of stone sacrifying old love songs The swords shine before the eye of the moon fire stabing the petals of the roses of your dead dreams the pale and cold hands of the children of night dance between the shadows of light She comes to play what she likes... dance over sharp blades while I drink a cup of wine beheading childs ... screams ... buried in the graveyard ... |
its good to see people are getting a little more serious with wat they write. i liked it all :cool: although, were you stuck for ideas when you did;
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not bad, but just seems as if you got stuck for ideas and turned something somewat poetic into a bit of a 'gore fest' ;) hehe :beer: |
I had to be a kick in the ass, but you spelled "title" wrong.
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nah dude, a tittle is a little tit. he was sayin he had no tittle.
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Oh, i wan unaware of that. Good job then!
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i found "insane fucker" to be more into my liking
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i think its well written tho you do have some spelling mistakes. i didnt like the part with "petald of your roses ofyour dead dreams" the "ofs" make it sound harsh and slurred
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