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Lord Malphas 2002-10-07 02:33

No tittle
 
well ... I just wrote this shit tonight ... and I wanted to post it ... I know it doesn't make any sense ... but here it goes ...



Here I am in the middle of an unknown forest
In the silence of the day that open arms to the night
while the crows of death fly to the forgotten land

Walking over a path of blood of Ancient Masters
onto the altars of stone
sacrifying old love songs

The swords shine before the eye of the moon fire
stabing the petals of the roses of your dead dreams

the pale and cold hands
of the children of night
dance between the shadows of light

She comes to play what she likes...
dance over sharp blades
while I drink a cup of wine
beheading childs ... screams ... buried in the graveyard ...

morbid_death 2002-10-07 02:54

its good to see people are getting a little more serious with wat they write. i liked it all :cool: although, were you stuck for ideas when you did;


Quote:
She comes to play what she likes...
dance over sharp blades
while I drink a cup of wine
beheading childs ... screams ... buried in the graveyard ...


not bad, but just seems as if you got stuck for ideas and turned something somewat poetic into a bit of a 'gore fest' ;) hehe :beer:

memnoch 2002-10-07 05:12

I had to be a kick in the ass, but you spelled "title" wrong.

slayme_returns 2002-10-07 15:34

nah dude, a tittle is a little tit. he was sayin he had no tittle.

memnoch 2002-10-07 17:16

Oh, i wan unaware of that. Good job then!

badmusician 2002-10-10 07:30

i found "insane fucker" to be more into my liking

mrweijia 2002-10-18 09:00

i think its well written tho you do have some spelling mistakes. i didnt like the part with "petald of your roses ofyour dead dreams" the "ofs" make it sound harsh and slurred


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