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Def 2002-09-08 07:19

Merge for the kill.... my first piece on metaltabs.
 
I want to fight
To live my own way
So take your evil and
Lie in your grave

Bow down to liars to devils filth
Bow down to wayward fool thieves
Lie down with prostitutes and
Lay down your body and soul
Lie down with broken bones
Lay down your body and soul
Lie down with evil and lie in your grave

Do you want to die forever?
Do you want to die forever?
Or do you want to live?

Bow down to liars to devils filth
Bow down to wayward fool thieves
Lie down with prostitutes and
Lay down your body and soul
Lie down with broken bones
Lay down your body and soul
Lie down with evil and lie in your grave

Do you want to die forever?

Merge for the kill
You will not bend or break my will
That breath your wasting
Should be the air your saving





I think it worked out okay, but the music isn't there yet... the last verse of the song is neat, I've also got it in my signature.
it's kind of an hardcore song, when you look at the lyrics, but who knows how it will end out.

Def 2002-09-08 07:20

and don't start bitching about the "lie down with prostitutes" part please ;)

Def 2002-09-12 14:56

comments??? anyone?

memnoch 2002-09-12 15:02

It's pretty good.

Def 2002-09-17 13:11

thanks man, I love this piece myself, especially the last part.

morbid_death 2002-09-18 05:47

its better than lots of the other shit i've seen on here lately.....but its lacking something....but i cant quite put my finger on. but nether the less, its pretty top notch :beer:

Def 2002-09-19 08:50

thanks man, I've almost finished another piece but the inspiration comes and goes when it comes to lyrics.
I don't know but somehow I agree with you about the "something missing" statement, I think I don't like the rhymy shit in the beginning.


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