Winters Lament
 

this one is a few months old and i've never posted it anywhere, so i thought wat the hell and here it is:

(it was originaly written to some music i wrote, hence the uneven structures. but that was to flow evenly with the music)

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-Winters Lament

Dull though glisten
I hear you scream
Wander in this dream

A solace soiree
The moonlit monolith
Trembling exegesis
And the obelisk crumbles to the ground
And in this dream
And in an instant
And when it falls
And when it ends

I am shackled to the wall
Shrouded in ghost like blackness
Lay in slumber on the pyre
And the winter takes me in this dream

Wearing the halo of disease, theiving marauder
I will come for you, just unchain my limbs
Bearing the crown of thorns, thine soul is immortal

I pledge myself to no one, decrepit and thin
Rancid flesh fills the air, your blood I will spill
Glittering and shinning bright, thine soul is valient

What will save you now
I will be your enemy
Just wait till the fall of night
What I see is blasphemy

Walk upon the path of stakes
You wander dripping with sin
Stepping back I impale your light
Just break me from this dream

Raise your fist and honor my name
Wave your sword and fight by my side
Revive my pride and rise from demise
Burning their flesh I can hear their cries

I fell from from the sky....and I drowned all the hope

um...its ok to reply you know?

what can i say other than its good,......hmmmmmm,...
it sucks so baaaad, i write better than you....:rolleyes: :rolleyes: :rolleyes: :rolleyes:
:vampire: :behead: :birthday: :stoned: :sleeping: :smash: :scatter:

i like the last verse best
what is monolith?
what is exegesis?

I'm guessing no one replied earlier because no one knew what the hell you were talking about.

I just read it.....i find your english to be quite mature and sofisticated, but i fail to see what the whole song is about.

well, in simple, its about being an individual, and when your feeling so great about the person you've become (the obelisk), people come and tear you down and destroying all self esteeme you had and it feels as if your stuck in a corner and you feel nothing but angst and want to inflict the 'eye for an eye' philosophy onto those who brang you down.

imagine how boring it'd be if i actualy wrote it like that? it makes things a whole lot more 'interesting' using everything metophoricaly and you can actualy in the end withdraw a number of meanings from the one song.

This is better than some things I've seen you posot - my main problem with most of your songs is that they're normally protected by a barrier of complex words - whilst these might fit sometimes, it seems often that you're saying them because they're rare and complex words; in this, you get more of an idea of the song, and it seems less like you're trying to imitate a solo in your lyrics.

It's well written, and I enjoyed reading it.

hey morbid death, i like more straight forward, hit you in the face, to the point kinda lyrix, but in a poem i like using metaphores, its a bit too long man, im also into repeating everything as many times possible and then only using meaningful phrases which translate my intentions with this song best. you are a good writer, keep digging up those lyrics dude.

I kinda agree with my fellow screamer, though, your work seems like a piece of art to me, almost like a poem.

it's a choice you make while writing lyrics, to be clear or to darken the songs meaning using difficult language (i prefer the last that's why I like these lyrics)

about the length, It all depends on the song, it might sound mighty fine but if you read it, then it 'feels' a bit long.

good call dude, but we're a more straight forward selfmindead kinda band, and the main purpose is, at least to me, bringing a message to everyone who hears us, it may be not that technical or poetical [lyric wise], but it's real emotions and that gives a kick, especially on stage, and about the length, it's ok, but no way i can remember all that shit! my short term memory is way too wasted for this kinda lyrics, so forget about that my friend:D

Haha, yeah, we sure have the 'kick' on stage don't we? :)

I like these lyrics by morbid_death, but it won't ever work for our style of music, I think we should classify ourselves as 'metalcore/screamo' or something in that direction :D

i like 'scremocore' it has some elements of our music, but i dont like labels but its nice if i can actually put a term on the shit we produce, so my mom can talk about that with her friends instead of my love life.

hahaha right on dude :)

see you tonight, scream your lungs out! :o

haha, yeah, cant wait for the next session baby! scream till you drop

thanks for the rants dudes. as you could read a few posts into the thread, i intentialy create the lyrics alien to the reader..thats my purpose and its my 'niche'. i dont force them thats wat just comes out while a tune plays around in my head :D. i'm trying to get a 1-man project going where i can show off how my lyrics are done but i have fallen victim Extremous Lazinous :sleeping:

haha, biology terms here? man, im impressed. but hey, nice lyrics dude, give that MEtalDrumFreak guy some good advice if you want, show him the way :P

Yeah, I agree, good job Morbid_death, keep up the good work

hehe, i've never seen his stuff. i stopped posting here for sometime because i thought i was meant to be banned a while ago and that obviously never happened...so anyhow, i'm back :D

I know, haha that was because of your bitching :P

good to have you back man, stick around.

you'd think with all our spam in this thread alone it would be closed by now...haha, still not modding this section i see? :p

you're really asking for it aren't you ? :p