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Tulvox 2006-02-06 18:23

"Apathetic End"
 
"Apathetic End"
Jacob Fitzlaff
9/6/2006

Chorus:
Countless days,
Restless nights.
I pray for sleep,
But none arrives.
Our clocks have broken.
Our clocks are broken.
Endless days,
Sleepless nights.
I pray for peace
to come to my mind.
And our clocks have broken.
Our clocks are broken.


The hours are nothing.
As I stand here and wish for a dream.
Some peace of mind.
A piece of me I've yet to find!
Something hidden away.
Something gone that was meant to be.

Chorus

The hours tick away.
Burning night into a flame.
And still I stand here.
I'll always stand here!
With empty hands,
Dancing closer towards sanity's end.

Chorus

Like sand through my fingers,
Or feathers in wind.
Your breath only lingers,
To remind me of when.
Smiles were so easy,
But they'll come again.
As soon as the clock stops
And this apathy ends.

The hours are undone.
Nowhere left for me to run.
And I give away,
My thoughts of yesterday!
And I pray for sleep.
Something to put end unto to my dreams.

Chorus

Our time is gone...

L,B'XXX 2006-02-06 18:48

You better record it and let me hear it. I especially liked the verse beginning "Like sand through my fingers." I thought it had some cool imagery in it and the flow was good. No changes, complaints, or corrections.
But! Where the heck have you been???

Tulvox 2006-02-06 18:49

Girl troubles is where I've been.

L,B'XXX 2006-02-06 18:54

Ohhh :( That's too bad.

Just don't make this sound like Nirvana on speed and it should be fine. ;) It's definitely a better song than that one anyways.

Tulvox 2006-02-06 19:02

Nirvana on speed is the only way to go. Best orgasm I've almost had. This one is going to be more Metallica-esque.

L,B'XXX 2006-02-06 19:10

Omg, is that what that noise was I heard in the recording? You sick person.
I like Metallica much better than Nirvana, but you guys did a good job on that song. Better than Nirvana did.

Like I said, if you record it I'd like to hear it. It looks very singable from your lyric.


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