some not-so-BM lyrics
I usually do Black metal stuff but my mind was at a different place, it's not as abstract.
My prescence shrouded in the darkness,
of shadows casted by neglect.
I feel exausted by this starkness,
while upon my life I reflect.
Looking back I could never see a day,
when I was happy to hold back.
Keep away all my enmity so I,
would'nt beat you down.
I swallow the pain with aborance,
as I try to embrace the decadence.
And once i've made you pay penance,
they'll never find the pieces.
The first verse sounds very black metal.
I really like it though, it could make a really good song. Thumbs up :D
Just 2 things, In the second line "cast" instead of casted. Casted isn't a word according to the online dictionary. And it right spelling is "abhorrence."
Small things, I know, but sometimes little things like that can really change a song. Not so much in this case, but that's the only thing I could see wrong. It had good balance of thought. I liked the structure and I think it would make a pretty cool song.
casted was a word in Elizabethan times, if this is for a black metal song, then and old feeling is appropriate. Fuck the online dictionary.
|All times are GMT -5. The time now is 19:24.|
Powered by: vBulletin Version 3.0.3
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.