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L,B'XXX 2004-05-18 07:25

" No End In Sight " --about current events
 
Barry McGuire's "Eve of Destruction" and Eric Burden's "Sky Pilot" keep going thru my head today as I was reading the Berg thread at ChitChat and thinking of the further events of the war. My old 60's /70's protest songs have been stirred. This would be done that way and I just about have a melody lie for it, too. There are only 7 lines in the first verse because that becomes the chorus eventually. Thanks for the read and comments appreciated.

And I just reread it myself and it could be adapted to a metal piece, too.


" No End In Sight "

It's gotta stop somewhere before it stops us all.
We tried to give them something
But's it's like we gave nothing at all.
There's no rest with the hatred.
No end will ever be in sight.
So maybe the time is now
To make this wrong right.

We gave them money we could have spent at home
For our starving and our lame
We gave them labor of our strongest
To help them to reclaim--
Their growth and prosperity,
But a few don't see it that way
And continue to destroy ours and their own
That pray for peace there everyday.

War is never a pretty thing
And it could have been over by now,
But those few carrying the death torch
Think they'll win something somehow.
But if they kill their own
They'll be no one left to see.
And what good is a nation
If who's left will not be free?

(chorus)
It's gotta stop somewhere before it stops us all.
We tried to give them something
But's it's like we gave nothing at all.
There's no rest with the hatred.
No end will ever be in sight.
So maybe the time is now
To make this wrong right.

So maybe there's only one solution
As much as it brings pain
To those who have to do it
And to those who they might have saved.
They've been fighting now for centuries
And it's not a good way to live.
So get it done and just move on.
There's no glory whoever wins.

(chorus)
It's gotta stop somewhere before it stops us all.
We tried to give them something
But's it's like we gave nothing at all.
There's no rest with the hatred.
No end will ever be in sight.
So maybe the time is now
To make this wrong right.

BJH

dying-oath 2004-05-18 16:45

ahhh....the sweet, sweet sounds of war, running through my head. I liked it Bobbi. it has a nice touch. i'm not so sure about the whole "we've got to stop it" part though...it seems to me that as long as we're on this earth there'll be war, so why try to stop it? why not just join in???.......dude, can you see the controversy coming??

L,B'XXX 2004-05-18 18:05

Sometimes my writing relieves or sorts out inner controversy. I needed an outlet to release some stressful feelings and this and the next one came out.

I don't want anyone to have to fight or to die ever. And the world is a lot more peaceful than it was centuries ago. I haven't heard of the rack or iron mask being used lately.
If I had to deal with the world, I'd sit everyone down with a bib, give everyone cookies and ice cream and tell them not to worry cuz there was enough for everybody. :)

dying-oath 2004-05-19 14:19

nice!......he's got more ice cream than i do!!! why is the world so screwed up?

Soulinsane 2004-05-19 14:38

I like it! I sort of hear it the way Pantara would have played it when I read it.

L,B'XXX 2004-05-19 18:57

HAH! Get yer spoon outta mine ! d'_o' !!


Pantera ? Are you serious? I never thought of this from that angle. I gotta think on that one, but thanks.

Soulinsane 2004-05-19 20:41

Sure, you know, the time sig of that song War Nurve!
This is what I heard in my head.

Song:
It's gotta stop somewhere
Before it stops us all
Try to give
But's it's nothing at all
No rest with hatred
No end in sight
So maybe the time
To make wrong right

Gave them money
We could have spent
Back at home
For our sick and lame
Gave them labor, our strong
To help them claim
Self growth and prosperity
Few do see it just this way
Continue to destroy our and their own
we pray for peace there everyday.

War
Never a pretty thing
Why isn't this over
Few carry the death torch
And fuck us all
Think they win somehow
Then kill their own
No one left to see
What a great a nation
That may be free?

(chorus)
It's gotta stop somewhere
Before it stops us all
Try to give
But's it's nothing at all
No rest with hatred
No end in sight
So maybe its time
To make wrong right

Only one solution
As pain begins
To those who do it
To those they save
Fighting forever
Fighting to live
So just get it done
And then we move on
There's is no glory
To hell with who wins

(chorus)
It's gotta stop somewhere
Before it stops us all
Try to give
But's it's nothing at all
No rest with hatred
No end in sight
So maybe its time
To make wrong right

I hope I didn't take your song out of context.
Forgive me if I missed what you were try to say.

L,B'XXX 2004-05-20 05:15

Man, that was awesome !!!! I loved it and it brought all the feeling into it without taking one iota away from it !! Cool as shit. Thanks ! And that definitely is harder and more metally sounding lyrically than mine.

dying-oath 2004-05-20 14:15

dude, i'm so stealing that. it's awesome. i'm gonna take it and put music to it if you don't mind. maybe even if you do mind, 'cause that's just plain cool. nice work L'B' and Soul. y'all have done well. wow.

Soulinsane 2004-05-20 14:43

I don't care. It is L'B's song and she may mind. I just wrote how I kind of heard it in my head when I read her stuff. I bet it would sound great with some heavy music too. L'B, that is a wonderful song you have here.

L,B'XXX 2004-05-20 18:21

Another collaboration is born ! Hey, go for it , grand-oath ;), but if it sells, you gotta share some profits and give us writers' recognition on the cover with me and the sailor there.
GO GET 'EM ! I wanna hear it !
:flame:

Soulinsane 2004-05-20 18:49

$ :D

L,B'XXX 2004-05-20 19:03

Hey, ya never know ! And I thought it was good. I wish some of those other metalheads around here that read would offer some constructive comments as to whether they like things or not. Who knows what can happen with the right talents put together.
Bob's first cd with his first band is at the Library of Congress copyrighted. And I eventually want to do a verse book so skies the limit !!

dying-oath 2004-05-21 15:12

hah. (there's that word again)
thanks guys. just watch, someday, i'll be famous (wow, the first metalhead who's gonna be famous...ever.) and then, while i'm up on stage, i''ll thank y'all for givin' me all the lyrics to my songs. yeah. right. what do you want...singing or screaming, or both? i just need a little vision for what you want( well, i actually already saw what you want [see: "The Girl From Nantuckett]).

Soulinsane 2004-05-21 15:34

I've always liked a mixure of singing and sceaming. I think it builds tention and makes everything more dynamic.

L,B'XXX 2004-05-21 18:31

If you'd want scream in it, I'd say either the chorus or the "War" verse would be best suited. The only thing I don't like about screaming is ya can't understand the words !!! Yeah , sometimes old age takes over.

If 'insane doesn't mind or wants to work with ya, I'd give ya free rein on it. I'd just like to hear it sometime and get credit for collaboration with you guys.


And grand_oath, about the Nantucket thread? You're so silly...... ;) I'm just a tad off the wall, that's all. I'm perfectly harmless.

dying-oath 2004-05-22 09:56

yeah, i know. i've been told that many times. course, my sister gets that told to her most.
okay, partial screaming it is. i think i'm gonna do it on the chorus iun a call and respose format (again...) and then just place it strategically throughout the whole piece. hope that'll work.

L,B'XXX 2004-05-22 15:25

Give it a shot. If it sounds like shit, I'll tell ya. And you'll have to go back to the labrotory. :)

Agent-Orange 2004-05-23 10:53

"And fuck us all"

I don't like that bit, I have never liked swearing in music (Except Grindcore) but other then that it was pretty good.

Soulinsane 2004-05-23 20:02

Yes, that part doesn't really fit to well, so maybe it could be edited to "And doom us all"? Just for the radio!


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