just a poem i wrote / opinions please

[[skreamer]]

this is an image flashing before my eyes
the angel turns her face to me,
pointing her bleeding finger
she screams! she dies. she is me.
i am the angel!
i dont want to be!
fallen from grace
i want to earn back my wings
scarred by the past
give me one more chance, again.
and again! no, i am too late.
i must hurry! i will not fail.
i lay in your arms to cry.
hold me now! i close my eyes,
you'd better be there to listen to me.
i know you're there.
You seem further away every time i look ahead.
but who is the one moving away?
walking away and away, to the distance
i run back to you.
to hide inside your hands.
will you still hold me close to you?
warmth is what i feel.
you are so pretty.
will you never leave me?


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i wrote it down in five minutes, what do you think?

[Def]

Nice stuff man, that style is familiar to me, I wonder why :D

just don't put the 'I wrote this in 5 minutes' comment in there, that sucks.

I'm really slow with writing lyrical stuff, which sucks ass, it takes me weeks..

[[skreamer]]

sorry dude! i usually write it down in a flash and then i read it over and over again, changing tiny bits, but i liked this the way it was, and i was tired :D see you soon.

whose style does it remind you off btw?

[Def]

Haha, yours fool... :)

See ya sunday at rehearsal.

[[skreamer]]

;)

sunday? i hope so, you'd better take a look at [5] and [by my side] at home, it saves us time in the studio, ok ? see ya then.