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MeTaLDrUmFrEaK
2002-11-12, 01:02
tell me what you think of lyrics?

Broken Down
I'm broken, broken down
Minds been twisting, spinning around
Hearts been torn out, every which way
My body's been bleeding in its own special way

Hey I'm broken ... down
I'm still choking ... now
Said hey I'm broken ... down
And I'm still choking ... now

Hey there Satan I'm shot full of holes
Times been cheating, those years take their toll
My prides been beaten, tattered and torn
Yeah I've been broken since the day I was born

Hey I'm broken ... down
I'm still choking ... now
Said hey I'm broken ... down
And I'm still choking ... now

Hey I'm broken, broken down
Minds been twisting, just spinning around
Hearts been torn out, every which way
My body's been bleeding in its own special way

Hey I'm broken ... down
I'm still choking ... now
Said hey I'm broken ... down
And I'm still choking ... now :flame:
CradleOfFilth
2002-11-12, 18:54
thats ugly

seriousely....
mrweijia
2002-11-12, 19:29
reminds me off blink 182 or nickelback
so

it... sucks
yes it does... suck
i think it... sucks
really....sucks

actually its not that bad, just a bit repitive
MeTaLDrUmFrEaK
2002-11-13, 00:18
reminds ya of blink dude blink sings about girls and trying to get a blow job and shit old nickelback before they sold out maybe not new thanks anyway
Gigantic Penis
2002-11-14, 17:05
well, since you have to expect criticism, i will say that it is truly horrible. the rhyming is predictible and it is repetitive.
xDarkestHourx
2002-11-16, 21:36
what the fuck?! I leave the boards for 5 days and this crap comes pouring in. I need to rectify this crappy lyrical situation fast. By the way, trying saying "HEY" about 20 fuckin thousand more times, that'd make it even cooler
Def
2002-11-17, 07:26
yes you are right my sXe friend, I will post my new work on here soon, I'm looking forward to your stuff.

this repetitive shit sucks, work on it dude, don't repeat every fucking word, it's ugly.
Gigantic Penis
2002-11-17, 11:30
Originally posted by mrweijia

it... sucks
yes it does... suck
i think it... sucks
really....sucks


thats really funny!

but yes, as i said earlier, this is total crap...
mrweijia
2002-11-17, 12:26
Originally posted by Gigantic Penis
thats really funny!

but yes, as i said earlier, this is total crap...

hehe, thanks
Dvsthrashmetal2
2002-12-15, 03:28
is it just me or does that sound like a drain STH song?